Progress Work: A quick story draft

Although nothing is set in stone yet, the general story Ferry and I decided on last weekend went something like this, it's a very rough version that gives a quick rundown of start, climax, and ending. We aren't entirely satisfied with an ending yet and will need some faculty feedback...

Additional details:
Plot: Superman goes for a coffee and runs into a fan who is robbing the store
Setting: A coffee shop at a street corner
Characters: Superman, Cashier at Coffee Shop, Robber

It’s bright and cloudy. We see two arms covered in a thin blue fabric pointing straight towards our destination. At a lightning fast speed we the viewer are going zooming through every cloud in space and approaching what appears to be a small city at an incredible speed. Immediately we see ourselves pushing through high rise buildings as we are already at the heart of the city. Suddenly we can no longer follow the two arms we first saw, but now we see them revealing a full body attached to them, a body which has a red cape attached to it with long black hair and suddenly its gone. It has moved beyond our view and we are left behind, it’s just too fast and all we see is a flash of red and blue light moving away from us.

EXT. Coffee Shop
We see a coffee shop at the corner of a quiet and not-so-busy street. We hear a fast approaching object, maybe a plain or a car? No it’s something else something much faster and stronger. We still can’t make out who or what it is as we see a lighting fast object zoom around the main narrow street into the coffee shop. This object moved so incredibly fast that all we see in the end is the coffee shop door open and close, as if a ghost just walked in.

INT. Coffee Shop
The identity of this unnatural being is still unknown to us but we know that it can travel at unprecedented speeds. In a first person view of this being we see ourselves approaching a nervous cashier at the counter who seems awestruck to see us. It’s as if he saw a ghost from the past, or an alien from another dimension. He nervously asks, “Howw..Can I help you..sir..maaaam…sir?”

We are now switched to a first person perspective view of the cashier. Through his eyes we see an almost hideous creature standing in front of us and are now revealed to the true identity of the alien being we were following earlier. It has long hair, thin wide lips and the most deepest darkest eyes ever encountered. In a very shallow and sweet voice it asks us, “Can I have a super double double please?” As the cashier we try to make out the order as quickly as we can when suddenly we are interrupted.

From a wide camera view we can now see everything in the coffee shop and are introduced to a new character. The character is a masked figure who seems to resemble the alien being strikingly. He approaches the counter in an aggressive manner and asks the cashier to hand over all of the money in the cash register. The cashier and the alien being are both surprised and have their hands up in the air. The alien being looks a little confused at the robber and lowers his hands. The Cashier is so nervous that he faints after looking at the gun.

Suddenly the robber takes off his mask and reveals his true identity to our alien being. He seems very excited and starts yelling “OMG…its you? It is you! I’m like your biggest fan” The robber then asks our alien being to sign an autograph. He is just too excited to be in the presence of this being and wants to snap a picture. He pulls out his camera phone and starts snapping a few pictures, requesting the alien being to make a few poses.

Apparently that isn’t enough, the robber wants to capture a video clip of the alien being floating/levitating to show his friends. An hour passes as we find our alien friend and the robber still at the coffee shop. The alien being is tired and sipping his coffee sitting at a table while the robber is jumping around making awkward gestures as if he is telling a story. He accidentally slaps the coffee off the table and our alien friend doesn’t look too happy. We see a flash of white air come out and find that our robber has been frozen in space and time; he has turned into an icicle. Our alien being flies off into the air…